Searria H.

Hey, Pari! I didn't think this was at all too long for a short story. I would probably rate it PG to PG-13 for language. :) I really enjoyed this ...

Hey there, Lele! I'm interested to see where you take this. I agree that you could make it a little longer and give us just slightly more information to draw ...

Hello there, YellowAeroplane! I think you're off to a good start here. :) The first thing I notice is that you have a lot of really short sentences, which makes ...

Hey, Bunny! You know I love you're writing, and you are very eloquent. :) I love the first and last few sentences. It gives us just enough confusion to kindle ...

Like everyone else, I adored this piece. I don't think there's anything wrong with your first sentence. It sets the tone of the piece wonderfully. I think just starting with ...

In agreement with purplepen, I would suggest you post only two or three chapters at a time, depending on the length. With such a long post, readers tend not to ...

Hi there! This was a very interesting piece, and I look forward to reading further. :D I agree with what previous reviewers have said, but I have a few nitpicks ...

Alright. This was a nice poem, but I do have a few nitpicks. :D I'm going to go through it stanza by stanza. Heart Thumping, Terrifying, What can I do ...

Most of what can be said has been said, but I will do my best. Yes, some parts were a little cliche, but there are only about 27 existing plots ...

Very interesting poem. You change tense all of a sudden in the middle to past-tense. I think I like it better in present-tense. The mountains sing a song unknown The ...

Very nice. I really felt for the Character. I too, have some nitpicks, though. :D Preface: The bright light of day began to fade and time appeared to become quick. ...

Hi! I'm Searria! Nice to meet you. Okie-Day. This was very grabbing. I already like your MC. :D I like your voice in this piece. My friends used to tell ...

This was very interesting. I was having a rather sun-shiny day, but I just had this strong urge to read this. Anyway.... This doesn't really have a point, but in ...

There was a good idea here, but I didn't really feel anything for your character. It was too short. You tell us that she had been the target of a ...

First of all, welcome to YWS! I'm Searria, but you can call me Sea. You have a good idea for a poem here, but the wording in some places is ...